I want to write I want to write
But this darned work sched is tight
So much to say and so many talks
Day light blues and moon light walks
But hey hey hey, please don't go away
I beg you to read, I beg you to stay
If you comment that would be great too
After all my readers are but a few
I promise to try and write up something new
Not only crib, bawl, and make you blue
Now thats been a real hard attempt to rhyme
I know it sounds shitty, but do I care a dime ;-)
PS: While I gave myself all the airs , (of course for no logical reason or credits), to be a serious poet, who deeply touched the chord of the few readers who read my posts more out of OK lets return the favor factor, one 'cool dude' or so he thinks himself to be, very intelligently (again he thinks so) pointed out, "Monica you write and all that OK, some of it does make sense too granted, but then these are not poems yaar. You seem to be mistaken somewhere, you see poems HAVE TO rhyme.".......So here is to my very intellectual friend (he does not follow sarcasm so I can call him a friend...he he wicked smile - is there an emoticon for this?????)......a real sincere attempt at bad rhyme. All nasty comments are welcome, though am sure to get one that says finally you understood what is poetry....fancy doing MA Lit and not knowing that. Dumb dumb Monica!
-A very desperate and fast losing patience with the world: Mon
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Glad you're having fun with poetry for a change. But yes, Please don't listen to your friend. Though I love stuff that rhymes, I know that a thought can get totally butchered if you're trying to bend it to rhyme with the previous sentence.
ReplyDeleteKeep writing!
Fun you call it....frustration is the word at having to listen to all 'intellectuals' this circus is packed with :-(
ReplyDeleteThanks for reading and commenting.
haha...this is great. A poem fit for the circus freaks : )
ReplyDeleteI think you should send it to sugar daddy for circulation
You hit the hammer on the nail....only the likes of sugar daddy and associated circus could understand the intensity of the rhyme....thanks for reading and commenting.
ReplyDeletein 2007 you wrote 15 posts, only 7 in the whole of 2008, and around 30 in 2009 already. of which 22 in just june and july 2009
ReplyDeleteDo you write more when you are upset? and don't write / don't feel writing at all when you are fine, settled, comparatively happy?
no that's no rocket science, just a trend your posts show
Do you have a problem being happy and settled?
you sure don't like the jerky bumpy ride that you make your life to be
no insights, just your posts
why do you always end up making it that way?
go girl sort some things out for yourself
get a life. be happy
Wow Mr/Ms Anonymous you seem to be quite analytical and seem to also have taken the pains to judge my life based on number of posts I write....don't you think thats too quick a concclusion to arrive at....considering you did not mention your identity, I am curious to ask how do you know what my life has been over thee past 3 years? Just the number and content of posts is sufficient verification? Heard of anything called fiction?
ReplyDeleteNevertheless, thanks for reading and taking the effort to air your views, though I would be happier if you were also bold enough to reveal your identity.
u are assuming
ReplyDeletethere are no judgments on anyone's life in the previous comment, and there are no assumptions
its just a comment on the posts here
and some questions that naturally follow
questions that do not seek answers
questions in their own right
pls accept my apologies, if that sounded like a judgment
its just a commentary, an unsolicited one, but certainly not ill intentioned
OK let me not explain or give answers, since yoiu ain't expecting any.....felt the tone was judgemental and said so, though never doubted the intentions :-)
ReplyDeleteOnce again thanks for reading and commmeting,sans the judgements if you so insist!
interesting debate - its healthy for the blog. pats on the back/cuffs on the head, whatever it is, i guess the writer has more satisfaction out of an analytical audience than a passive one with embellishments like 'ya ya nice poem' or important questions like 'u said u sniffled - was it becoz u caught a cold or becoz u cried?'
ReplyDeletethings look more alive now.
Thanks D, if not on posts am glad you commented on the comments ;-)
ReplyDeleteOh but analytics here means a culture shock. The verbally explicit (analytical) meets the high context (writer).
ReplyDelete@Anonymous - my moderate grey cells fail to understand what you are trying to say.
ReplyDeletethe analytical is verbally explicit and writing is high context. even when writing is explicit, it is still high context. analytical leaves nothing on context, it explores and illustrates and contrasts and exposes what it draws as insights. the two cultures are different and there would be a culture shock when one meets the other.
ReplyDeleteAnalytics here means a culture shock.
When things weren't alright,
ReplyDeleteand there was loneliness,
the dark depths of the night,
and the tears in your eyes.
Surely, you tried before you cried.
When your heart was hunting,
for the method in the madness,
and who vowed to be a knight first thing,
Left you with only less.
Certainly, you tried before you cried.
The world is not ending
There's still hope & happiness
Stop pretending, scale these simple tests
Just soar, high... and spread your wings.
Your tears are precious, not some silly mess.
Tell me, you'll try before you cry.
Promise me, you'll try and never cry.
- * -
Arvind.....the lines are beautiful....am touched....i promise to try :-)
ReplyDeletenice work...very lucid!
ReplyDelete@Da Vinci...been long since I heard from you and actually been long since I read your works too!!!! You probably the only one whose liked this one...thanks and am glad you re-visited and took the time to read and write back.
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